Opening
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Poor Relationships.
Subject matters: Girlfriend's dreams/Fantasies.
Elaboration: Possibility, I need to develop this a bit more, and I know I can; I've had a lot of failed relationships in the past, and so has everyone else. This part is probably going to be the most organic aspect of my act, since I like to think the first minute or so I will just be getting-to-know the audience to develop a feel for how they react to my stage presence.
Transition: Use my late-start as a reason that I'm not very good at relationships. Ala "making up for lost time" since I used to be a fat nerd.
Body
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Growing up a Fat Kid.
Subject matters: How I got fat/fat kid diseases (much more narrow in scope than the post made)/looking in the mirror and lying.
Elaboration: Not really, no. Unless the audience is absolutely eating it up, I'm only using this segment to continue my part of the "conversation" I am having with the audience, where I set up what type of life I've led and better establish my character.
Transition: Something along the lines of "as a result I've spent a lot of time watching TV," something that leads well into the next discussion.
Ghost Adventures.
Subject matters: Absurdity of premise/how successful a frat boy can be with practiced exploitation/what passes as entertainment in this country.
Elaboration: Decidedly so. I have to take Zak Bagans and turn him into a memorable personality in this part of the act, because he will be used later in the act when I discuss porn. I'm not holding any illusions that this club will shy away from that sort of material since I've watched every single open mic that was recorded there, and it has gone over well.
Transition: Speaking of entertainment, lets talk about one of the most popular entertainment industries in the country: Porn!
Porn.
Subject matters: Is pretty awesome for guys like me/kind of like a super hero comic in how it portrays people/most annoying porn to me/fantasy marketing power of porn.
Elaboration: Yes and no. This segment will be improved in a large part. Whenever I talk about porn I always think of something more to say. I have my subject matters and I plan to lay them out in subsequent posts, but it seems every time porn is discussed, I have new input. I'm something of a porn tycoon. This will be the most highly improved segment of the act.
Transition: How I have to make a long drive home from the act. Use this to say something about how "I hope the traffic isn't bad on the drive home."
Close
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Traffic.
Subject matters: Long accidents and slowing us down/inconsiderate people/terrible people being unavoidable--how much I just wanted to eat my sandwich.
Elaboration: No. This is the close, and it has to be shot into when I have under a minute and a half left. The idea behind the close is a subject matter that can be easily adjourned from. Regardless of where I am in my traffic bit, I can always exit stage-left, which I've read and been told is the most important thing a starting comedian needs to know how to do. Once I get the signal that time is up, I will end my set. I want to establish myself as a professional in this business, and one who can be counted on to do what he signed up to do. No more no less. Professional.
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At any rate, this is what I've got so far. I know you haven't heard all the jokes that I've noted in here, but trust me in that I know the strength of my own jokes relative to one another. The biggest problem with this blog at the moment if you can't hear the stage personality I've developed in order to see how it enhances the jokes. I'm going to be recording my practices sometime soon to give a better idea to help facilitate more constructive feedback.
I may interchange or intermingle the "grow up" bit into this.
ReplyDeleteI would go fat kid --> grow up
ReplyDelete"The thing is that it didn't matter that I was fat when I was kid... nothing mattered then... etc. etc."
then grow-up --> ghost hunters
"So now you know why I have no friends... except television...."
television ---> porn
"This isn't the kind of shit that should be on TV. Television is such an underutilized medium. Shows could be developed that enrich our lives, you know, like porn!"
Just a thought.